BookRix

Amen sister. Our Lord speaks the Truth. A well written story with lots of descriptive language that captured the emotions.

James

You paint a very clear picture as if watching a movie instead of just reading. You hold your breath waiting for the rock to fly only to exhale in relief when it doesn't. Very enjoyable read.

Your descriptions and vocabulary seem so prefect a way to contrast the boy's wielding of ignorance and anger, that I was just a bit put off by the quote.

In many eyes, such a quote (which is a wonderful one) replaces the rationality you've displayed.

Your character's disposition toward aggression is the key here. And, whether attributed to an Eastern philosophy or Western religion, it is wisdom gained through long contemplation and deep examination.

It is a pity that, far too often, quotes become the rote answers–even in opposition to their intent.

I'd quote Socrates on the examined life here... but that would be failing to heed my own advice.

Really fine work.

I can see we have another brilliant transplant from Author Stand! Welcome to Bookrix - and thank you for this divine, offering. A short vignette - not much action per se, but definitely a deeply described, in-depth and brilliant portrayal of a small section of time between two people.

Every detail was perfect, setting the stage for the "confrontation" that never occurred. I am deeply impressed with your vocabulary, descriptive passages and ability to make a story out of such a small incident.

You captured perfectly the attitude of the young man - wary and hostile - with his built-in negativity and suspicion of strangers. And then the denouement! Perfect. You have given us a mini-masterpiece here. Exceptional writing from a new and valuable member.