Broken

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Broken
some says love is beautiful.....is it really so?what do we get from love other than sadness.....we are left with nothing....we are simply broken.......

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judycolella

That kind of blind love is, indeed, universal, and you capture its devastating consequences very well.

You need some major editing in terms of grammar (your spelling is perfect, though), and there should be spaces between the paragraphs for clarity, but once that's done, you'll have a real gem.

I hope you plan to continue it, and share more of your character's journey. This has enormous potential!

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Terrex

Broken seems like a nice title for this particular story and it like a fairy tale of some sort where your in love with this guy and all your feelings for him take over compleatly i think this will make a #1 seller hit

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Kalai

Write more.... The story can be developed further... Good to read..

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