I agree with you Ripples. More elaboration need to be done. If you don't mind, you can help me edit it? I still need to learn how to make my stories more precise
I really appreciate the feedback. I will elaborate more on Justine and Nicole's friendship to make to store more precise and enjoyable. Bookzilla, you mentioned that my story has a lot of mistakes. If you don't mind, can you point out those mistakes besides what you said above?
Would have enjoyed it more if there were more background on the main characters so I could hate on the Jerk more. I also think editing needs to be done so that more people could enjoy your story, just my thoughts.
the story is super intense, but you need to have somebody edit it for you because there are a lot of mistakes. also, to make the reader get more into the story, you should add more details about the lives of nicole and justine - more about their friendship. you should also add more about why justine decided to get together with shawn - he seems like a jerk, so you need to explain to us why she would ever do something like... Show more