I thought you said it was completed! I feel cheated I only got the first page.....Let me know when you fix it, it sounds like something I would like to read.....
Good beginning, but before you put it up for sale, you might want to get some editing help to clean up the English and fix some of the grammatical errors, like tense-switching. If you did that, you'd have a really interesting story. Even with the mistakes, though, it caught my interest. Imagine how much more dynamic it will be once it's edited. I wish you the best with this - it has a lot of potential!
Thank You so much :) I'm new to writing. I'm not a native English speaker. Hope to find someone to edit.
Not bad so far, but I only got the first page. You might not have it set for the rest to be seen.
:O I didn't know! I'll try to fix it. And thanks for you comment :)
So what we see is just a sample, you might want to check to see if you have it for sale. Try to use, just for bookrix , and stop sale, so we can see the whole story. That way we can give you more feedback.
okay, thanx :)
Again! This is the second comment I got on this :O, I really don't know how to fix it. I'll do my best...
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