Oh my goodness! This is awesome! I can understand the pain you explained through your character ;) Amazing!
I do have some critiques, however:
You messed up some spelling, but only little bits.
And you should probably make the paragraphs more defined, as I always say ;)
There are several sentences that could have been better, but I overlooked them as the story was so cute and I could totally understand what was going on.
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am using notepad instead of word, so that may be why the spelling errors and the odd formatting. My computer currently does not allow access to word for some odd reason.
That was cute. :) I love how you start it out, describing the boy and his modesty. The formatting is slightly strange, though. Is it purposeful that you have it broken into two-line segments? Other than that and a few typos, I liked it. I can definitely relate. Good luck in the contest!