I read this last night and I didn't know it was in a contest. Wow, I have to say I didn't you could get a great story out in such a small about of words. You did a fantastic job!
I cannot fault the quick ending - the story was well executed and I got your clue to the killer in the delayed concern. Hope you do or did well in the contest.
I hope too, you expand on this story, there is a lot of meat in this short story...p;]
Thanks, everyone, for your support and encouragement. I'm so happy you enjoyed my 'creepy' little tale. Lol! :o)
This is a fast, short story, full of twists and turns. I'd like to see this expanded into a much longer work which I'm sure you could do it.
I have only one reservation. The narrators wording seems somewhat old fashioned compared to the dialogue. You might need to change one or the other.
Nevertheless, you have a good story here so, well done.
Carol x
Ah, that story started off in a terrifying way (who wants to be buried alive?) .but ended up with a nice tidy conclusion. Short, sweet and quite satisfying. Thank you, Melissa.
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