Can you put the prose into paragraphs and fix that first section where the lines run into the next line (if you know what I mean)?
Let me know
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I found this book on mario796's list of favs and the title captured my atention. It was great.
Thank you so much for your kind words Ripple.
LaJune Marie
Good! It reminded me of Steven King's work. I had no idea what was going on until the end, which I found to be one....oh I don't want to give it away for others. But let's just say, wow! Great work, Ms. LaJune Marie. Scary!
LaJune,
You have written an edge of your seat, scary, thrilling, nail biting what's going to happen next mystery story. It kept my attention to the end. Wow, what a nightmare-dream of an ending.
Excellent writing!
Thank you Mario for your insightful comments. I found them to be quite constructive. They let me know that i accomplished my goal with that piece.
LaJune Marie
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