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READ ON OR DIE TONIGHT AT 10:35 P.M 9 years ago a person named Jerry got dared to sleep in a house that was believed haunted. The next day his friends waited for him outside the house...... They had to go inside and search for him. They went through every room exept the attic. He wasn't supposed to sleep there. He was supposed to sleep in the living room they went to the attic
. They saw Jerry's corpse and they just left because they were scared. But that night they all died because of their friend. He killed them for making him sleep in that house if you don't send this to 11 comments you will die tonight by Jerry. Example 1: A man named Stewart read this and didn't believe it. He shut off his computer and went through his day. That night while he was in bed he heard something outside of his door. He got up to look. And now he's dead. Example 2: a girl named Haley read this in the morning and she got scared but she didn't send it. She wanted to now if it was true. She went to school (She was only 13 years old) and that night she died. If you don't post this on 11 comments Jerry will 'visit' you his isn't fake. Apperently if you copy and past this to ten comments in the next ten minuets you will have the best day of your life tomorrow. You will either get kissed or asked out, if you brake this chain you will see a little dead girl in your room tonight. In the next 53 minuets someone will say I love you or I'm sorry

I liked the journal format. It made me feel as though the events were unraveling before my eyes. Maybe start the first chapter out with Dear Journal and keep it consistent through out the story. I also liked how you wrote in a manner that would indicate the age of the protagonist in the story. What I would have liked to see changed was the run on sentences that I saw throughout the story. Also the story felt a bit short. Maybe at the beginning of the story talk about events leading up to the camping trip. This would give you time to introduce the characters to your audience. Overall it a was a nice read.

Has the next book been written yet???

cool

The concept was good. You need to concentrate on your grammar. Bad spelling and grammar tends to make me start editing, instead of reading what you wrote.
Try to keep a dictionary around to look up words. This is just my opinion, and is said in respect. Please don't take offense. Good luck and keep writing.

BRAVO! I AM SO READY FOR BOOK 2!
IS IT SOON OR HAS IT COME OUT YET?

I'm sooo going to read book 2

i couldnt tell who was saying what

I hope as well, that vol.II will come soon.

Really exciting! When will you upload voluzme II?