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Review - This is a worthy story. It has a moral, done in an everyday setting, with every day people told by an exceptional person. There are some transition problems, but overall an honest, down to earth description of the toils of marriage. I enjoy your 'voice'. You developed some unusual sentence descriptions that I really enjoyed.
The story moved well, kept my interest and I connected with your characters on an emotional... Show more
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This is a bold attempt and, hopefully, there will be more to follow.
Keep at it - you have what it takes.