BookRix

I hate to be rude. And it is a good book. But everything in it is happening to fast slow things up a bit and give more detail...I bearly knew what was going on... Also work a little on you grammer...And no offense but i hate when people take someone elses book and add on to. I think you should leave it to stephanie myer to decide what happens to Jake and Nessie I mean they are her characters after all not yours.... I just hate it so much when people do that because i have had people do it to me.... they would take my story my angles deadly sin based off the kid and her soulmate and everytime she would have a different soulmate it would really upset me because i think it should be my decession on what happens and now i cant write a new story based on the child camaya because all my ideas have already been used when they took my book..... Besides is it even legal..... to do that to an author right a whole new story based on their book....isnt that basically stealing there story....... But anyway you really are a good author and i would love to read one of your books that arnt continue ons to someone else story sorry that really hits home for me and it pisses me off i cant stand for someone to do that...................well bye

it was nice , detailed , but you miss spelled the words [same]

thank you all for reading it and to all those haters I don't care if you hate it or not but you likers or lovers tell me what i need to work on!

can you tell me what you thin of it now.

I believe it does need a tad bit of work. Specially with the font. I'm sure you'll do good there are plenty of Twilight fans here.

I am sorry to say, but this was entered into a contest about your work, not Stephanie meyers unthought ideas... I'm sure that you have wonderful ideas, and I am not meaning to sound rude, but this is more of Fanfiction.

It could use a little polish, but congratulations:)
Perhaps lower the font size, too, to say 12 point? When I opened the book the size of the type FRIGHTENED me:) Made me jump!

Ask friends to read it for you...check your sentence structure and spelling. Keep refining your work:)
Best to you!