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book one of Hannah James series By:
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Hannah James is in her worst nightmare, never escaping the orphanage she was raised in. until the day Hannah and her best friend Jesse find something so dark that they must travel the world to put all the peices of the story together. will Hannah an Jesse find the truth? will She find out who she really is? and will she really want to find out? MY BOOK IS NOT FINISHED YET COMMENT WITH SUGGESTIONS! :) THANKS!ONLY 3 CHAPTERS SO FAR!

  • Fantasy
  • 586 Words
  • Ages 0 and up
  • 654
  • 5
  • Publication Date: 09-08-2011
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willspointgirl
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willspointgirl

thanks i tend to do that "are" insted of "our" thing its a bad habit. Im glad you like it but i dont know how to start it off. im almost done with the rough draft but i keep changing things. :p thanks for your comments i really take them to heart

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nafaei
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nafaei

Already I like your character, Hannah, and I have a bit of a feel for Jesse as well (as it so happens, I have a close guy-friend named Jesse as well, haha :)
Anyway, so far your descriptions are good; but be careful, you tend to use a lot of run on sentences. One more little tip, you want "our" instead of "are" in some places :) otherwise, very good, can't wait until you add more

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