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okay you need to fix a lot of things sorry you need to fix like a lot spelling everything and f.y.i renesmee has reddish hair!!!
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it was indeed short but continue writing and it will b perfect
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this is a lame as hell no good nock of book that stephanie meyer would be ashamed her books could be related to
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The mother-daughter relationship was cute and sweet. :) I'm assuming this isn't a complete story so I'm not quite sure about the plot yet.
Writing-wise, you still have a couple of spelling errors and some stuffs you need to reword; but you'll surely be able to work on those.
And cute cover, by the way :)