Nic and Jay C have been in love since they were teenagers but there's something in the way of them finally having the dream life they've always only talked about. Together, they come up with a plan that will change their lives, and effect the people around them forever. Will they end up together? Or will their plan unfold and back fire on them?
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This is extremely well-written! Too many stories in this genre are not only full of gratuitous sex with no plot, but are drenched in grammar and spelling errors. This is not, and it's refreshing to read such a passionate work that's also, well, readable, lol. Thanks for sharing it, and I hope you enjoy the site!
Thank you for your kind words! Its in editing so do you suggest anything that would make it better. Is it bad that I don't have any dialogue?
This is written in narrative-style prose, and doesn't call for a lot of dialogue. However, a little here and there (like what you did near the end) will keep the story moving.
thank you so much you are so helpful! nicest person I've met on BookRix
Thanks - you're very kind. :D
We're a community of writers and I think we grow best when we help others to grow, too, you know? I've found that when I give another writer's work a serious, objective read, I always learn something useful. We all make the same kinds of errors, as... Show more
Thanks - you're very kind. :D
We're a community of writers and I think we grow best when we help others to grow, too, you know? I've found that when I give another writer's work a serious, objective read, I always learn something useful. We all make the same kinds of errors, as well as have equal amounts of inspiration. And sometimes, those errors ARE the inspiration.
Writing is so awesome, lol!