The Uninvited

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User: wells12
The Uninvited
This is my entry in the "Beat the Clock" contest. A brother and sister find themselves hiding in a closet from whatever kind of creature has invaded their home.

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Short story
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Deleted User

Lol, loved the ending. You did a great job with keeping up the suspense.

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JennaB.56

What a scary story only to find out it was just two cats fighting. cute story tho'

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wells12

Hello Alex
So glad you liked the story. It was fun to write. I'm not much of a monster person, but I love a good joke. This seemed a good direction to take. Your comment and heart is much appreciated.

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wells12

Thanks Michelle for your kind comment. It is much appreciated.

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gracefulwings

I really enjoyed this one. It had the suspense of the scarier stories but with a cute ending that most people didn't think to try or didn't do as well.

On a side note, you were either the only one or were one of small few to change both kids' names. It just stuck out in my mind that the cat story changed Jimmy's name. Now I know who the cat person is! :p

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mkidd6

Very nice! Wonderful suspense and great surprise ending. :)

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wells12

Hey Laz, Thanks for the comment. I think you and I are kindred spirits. I'm not much into gore!

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