good book, the story line was unique and fun, I also love how you added pictures of the characters in there :). I am excited to read the next book to see where you take the plot from here!
Now just a little critique, be careful with your punctuation, and be sure to capitalize names, beginnings of sentences and "I" should also be capitalized. Also there is no sense of how much time passed, you should add in references about... Show more
good book, the story line was unique and fun, I also love how you added pictures of the characters in there :). I am excited to read the next book to see where you take the plot from here!
Now just a little critique, be careful with your punctuation, and be sure to capitalize names, beginnings of sentences and "I" should also be capitalized. Also there is no sense of how much time passed, you should add in references about time so the story flows better.