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I like how short and concise this is. It's like a snapshot, almost like a picture of the end of the world, rather than a video like other entries. I am confused, though, as to whether your character is laying on the ground or walking around...
Important Post
I think this would be my first short story, that I wrote. COMMENT PLEASE!!
How I like to write occasionally is that each reader can choose how the story is played out in their head.