BookRix

I had to think about it and go over the story to understand the character's reaction to the news. You did a great job of building my expectations and cleverly drawing me away from the objective of the story. Great job.

If this wasn't so tragic, it would be funny.
Well presented story of an obsession...one of many.

How sad! I'm not sure what else to say. This is one of those stories that you don't want to read but you can't help yourself. Great job.

It's sad when something you love to do becomes the thing you dread. I try to learn and improve as I write, but if it meant feeling like this, I'd find a way to content being a bad writer. I’d have to write no matter what.

The saddest thing of all is when we fear the joy of our own accomplishments. When that becomes this debilitating, it is tragic.

very well written

Good luck in the contest.

I know you're selective. It's a good discipline.

B

An interesting take on battling with ones inner fears, coupled with a drastic ending that served the story well.
Good luck in the contest
I may vote for this.
Wendy xx

i agree with everyone else's praises. the story was interesting and intense and funny all at once.

great job!

wow you're actually quite brilliant, good job. I don't really have anything to say but that you have serious talent and you should advertise more so more people will read this.

You know, I've never thought of the coin being flipped the way you did it. And I really liked it. As the saying goes 'with great power there comes great responsibility'...but putting it into writer's terms 'with great recognition comes great stress to perform even better in the future!'

But somehow, I'll bet you're up for the challenge!

Avery