Beth, I must say that when I first started reading this, I had no idea where it was leading to...but then as the characters all seemed to be converging towards one another at a specific time...the subtle hints you laced throughout the tale all started to come together.
I wanted to tell you how impressed I was with your work much sooner but as a judge, I was asked to be as fair an impartial as I could possibly be...which meant... Show more
You have a nice story going here. That's awesome.
Beth,
You have written a story about how people go about their daily lives and never know what will come next. You are a talented young writer. I enjoyed the story from beginning to end. You have my vote.
Excellent writing!
So subtle the way our lives are intertwined with the lives of others; and how fleeting life can be. That fateful day will never be forgotten. Your writing is visual, relatable and subtle, even when packing that final punch. I look forward to reading more of your work. Much success to you.
Very sharp. The beginning was very reminiscent of the kind of writing you find on ABC sitcoms, then toward the end you gradually continued to pick up the pace until finally smacking me into that ending. Knife-like wit.
I think it was marvelous the way you brought the lives of a group of everyday New Yorker's and weaved them together into this beautiful mosaic of what life was like for them just moments before that fateful event. Thank you for such a wonderful read.