This is extremely well-written and has believable, sympathetic characters and a smooth plot line. Honestly, the only recommendation I have is that you change the age group to 16 and up so you aren't in violation of the BookRix Code of Conduct. Even the cover is a bit much for the 12-year-olds.
Other than that, though, I would recommend you promoting this in some of the groups, like "Erotica" and similar groups that have been started specifically for older members who enjoy this genre. You're most likely to get great feedback there, and a lot more reads.
All the best - you're an extremely talented writer, and I'm sure if you write in other genres as well, the work is every bit as excellent!
I would add that experience enhances imagination. No choice necessary. ')
That's right my dear!
Please update Debora, I'm dying to know the next part please please please !! I loved this book it's one of the best stories I have ever read .