The green eyed monster works it's way through to the mind. Discovery of a happier time will revel only to find the glory of a touch./joeparente

Good use of repetition and shock and pathos a gripping read. Needed to read it several times to get it into focus. Well done - JOHN

The repetition worked very well in building up the tension. You successfully conveyed the horror of this traumatic event. It must have been very painful for you to write this story.
Good luck!
Betty

Hi Timmi,

Your fictional seems like poetic encounters of written words…, which forces the character to face a traumatic experience of losing someone very special. I voted keep writing)

Linda B

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