In only two chapters the reader is drawn into the world surrounding Owen. The storyline is fine but how it is worked lends a clue to how successful the story might be. Editing might help the story a great deal but before that happens a revision of the action scenes is needed. Perhaps the 'dog' scene might be the intro to the whole book.
I heard about the contest, and thought this rough draft would be perfect for it. I didn't get a chance to edit the piece, but I do hope everyone enjoyed it.
I really enjoyed reading the first part of Owen. I think you have a nice imagination and i look forward to reading more about this you boy and his new family! Keep it up and i will keep my eyes open for more :)
loved the idea and the presentation. You have some work yo do on tightening up sentences but it should not be hard. Great starts deserve my vote!./joeparente./ great cover.
