This sounds like it would be an awsome book. But I really dont like this kind of book.
Beardie

It`s a good book please write more

Done!

I'm happy to say the plot became more twisty and complex as it went on. I still think some things could have been done in greater depth, but in the end it's a love story, so I understand the lack of politicking.

Anyway, a good read!

I'm only one third through so far...

The writing style is fairly straightforward, if you'll excuse the phrase, and the plot thus far hasn't been really surprising, but it's holding my interest.

One point. Sometimes you use 'thy' and other olde English, and other times you don't. It's probably best to either use one or the other, rather than a mix. I had this very same issue with one of my (rare) short stories, so I changed it to all olde English. Not an easy task!!

Also, I think I'd drop the prologue altogether, it gives the plot away. If you didn't have it, then you could let the reader guess what's happened as the story continues.

Anyway, I'll say more when I've finished.

Disclaimer:
The above is simply Chinaren's opinion. It is written as constructive feedback, and no offense is intended.
You are free to agree or disagree as you wish! :)

I loved this book. It is my personal favorite.

Real Good Book Susan.

Thanks for the star and the save to fav skulker. Glad you like this story.

I want to thank everyone who has given me a star and/or saved this book to their favorites. I'm glad that you consider this story a good one.

Thanks for star and glad you added it to you favs.

Going to keep it safe in my fav's vault. ;-)