Beautifully written, a truly modern tragedy. You have my vote.
Carol x
Beautifully written, a truly modern tragedy. You have my vote.
Carol x
Very, very well-written. No one watches movies about the Titanic and expects one of them to end with the ship NOT sinking, and the same is true with the Romeo and Juliet tragedy. What makes this story unique, though, is how the sad ending comes to be, and your build-up to that moment is wonderful. Here's my vote.
Your characters portrayal and reactions were well thought out.
I even felt pity for the brother, as I felt his anger was a release of the hurt and pain he felt re. his Granddad's betrayal and immense suffering, as a direct result of one of the Montague clan's actions.
You have won my heart & vote, once more.
Chris
I love your poetic prose – wonderful and sets the tone for this love piece. The pace was good and kept my attention. With the clash between families the author changed style to reflect the sharpened edges of the dialogue. If anything it ended to abruptly for me. The plan came fast and more surprising to me that it did end with an ever after happy ending, rather than a crash that backfired and would end in tragedy.
I like your story "Loves Dark Rose". So much that you have my vote. :)