Imaginative, well written and spellbinding.

luvvvvvvv it

the ending. Brilliant take on a timeless tale.

This is exactly how I've been trying, and want to eventually, write like. You have description down to a T and it isn't overdone. You kept me interested and I could visualize everything you were saying. You truly have talent and I hope to be able to be up to your level someday soon.

Very good job

Thanks for the feedback everyone, it really made me smile :)

P.S: Merci for pointing that hiccup out to me, evercaptivating. It seems no matter how many times you read over something, some typos just get lost. Typical, haha!

Your writing is so very polished! The entire story is filled with stunningly lyrical imagery...and irony. Kudos!

Excellent story! I loved the ending -- I sure wasn't prepared for that. Very well done, indeed!
CJ

This was entertaining all the way through, the visual alone was awesome and with so few words, you did a brilliant job. The ending was really good too!

*Little note: Pg 6. second line, it should be 'as' instead of 'has'. Very common... so this is no biggie. I didn't see anything else, because the story was so good!

Oh, my! Excellent...can't wait for more!

huff...didn't expected that! Great scene setting!