This is a very interesting book! But, it also really needs some work & its seems very similiar to my good friends book, 'Like A Drug?' Ring any bells? Maybe you've read it...? Anyway, there needs some work on the punctuation and paragraph breaks in the descriptions of the characters and surroundings (because at the beginning it didn't really tell us that the main character had a twin, or that they both have special... Show more
Criticism:
This book has similar points to mine, but I might be over thinking. People write the same books so I shouldn't say much. You should work on your grammar, punctuation is okay and the characters personalities are a bit..much. But overall nice book. Your plot is heading somewhere good, I can tell. Nice to leave us at suspense at the end. Keep up the good work!
-Marie
well write now im in the process of writing out the next chapter. once im done editing ill upload it. :)
pls pls let me know when the chapter comes out your really good all thumbs up
Dont worry it doesn't stop there thats just the ending of a chapter. i will posting this story up by chapters and any other book i may write, for that mater. im writing the other chapters now as we speak. :)
