The only question....did he kill himself...was it her who stabbed him in the chest?

Taking the plunge! Am I to understand that this is the first works to be submitted? I was drawn in from the very first sentence and was engrossed till the very end.
I amlost wanted to turn away and stop reading it, because it felt as if I was witnessing a very personal and private moment between the two lovers.
Good luck on the contest and look forward to reading the rst of your works.. BRAVO!!!!!

This was so beautiful and tragic.
But it was amazingly written(:

Danielle.

It's so sadly beautiful!
If there were any mistakes, I was too wrapped into the story to notice. <3

~Edan <3

You never fail to amaze me. I am a big fan of your work and I didn't find anything wrong with your grammar or such. You are a very talented writer and you should continue to write.

This piece was very heartfelt and expressed to major lengths the bond between two people when they are in love. I will definitely be voting for this on the contest.

One last thing, I would highly appreciate it if you checked out "Burned" on my profile. You don't have to but I would love to have feedback from someone as talented and thoughtful as you.
-Sapheria-

although it is such a sad story, your writing is very beautiful and really draws the reader in. i wish we knew why the man died...

Written with intense emotion! The imagery and description was entirely visible, and the heart contained within...breath-taking! Very well done.

I wish you good luck in the contest. 8)

This had a very dream-like quality to it. Great job on the descriptions and portraying the emotions of the man towards the woman.

Beautifully written sad story...very prose like.