i think you have a good basic idea. however i do think you have too many big ideas and your workin em in a bit too fast. Your just coverin some pretty big things. you have such a good prologue,i just dont know why you decided that your character had to loose his speech.its too much. im not tryin to be harsh but I work in publishing. To be honest i think this piece needs work.Use the werewolf and the guy next door angle. Just... Show more
i think you have a good basic idea. however i do think you have too many big ideas and your workin em in a bit too fast. Your just coverin some pretty big things. you have such a good prologue,i just dont know why you decided that your character had to loose his speech.its too much. im not tryin to be harsh but I work in publishing. To be honest i think this piece needs work.Use the werewolf and the guy next door angle. Just drop the extra stuff and save the big scenes or pt.s for later on in your novel. oh and drop the southern thing im from Georgia and your makin it too chezzy