Very good, a great read...

My best,
Steven

Very good, a great read...

My best,
Steven

Elegant. Like a quiet reflective film. Maybe "Cashback." As a fellow writer, and a musician myself, I wanted to tell you that your writing here conveys a penetrating ambiance that's impossible for me not to bask my self in. Keep it up.

Forgive me if I compare this piece to watching a classic movie. Things are different now, but there was a time when everything had a certain amount class to it and being in black and white helped. I imagined this world the child lived in to be light an old black and white movie, except for Lucien. He stands out. I try to imagine him as he has been described, but I can't see him. I think I prefer to keep him a mystery. This is wonderfully written. I enjoyed reading this very much. Capturing the imagination of a child in a mature way isn't easy and for that I commend you.

This book was a masterpiece, you told a tale full of melancholy and of sadness with such a beautiful and powerful voice. I'm in awe, really... Your talent is undeniable and the way you captured the child's infatuation and admiration for Lucien was so chillingly real, I could feel the longing in your words. Truly wonderful. Voted.

You clearly showed this child's black and white world with dashes of color brought in by Lucien. Although this story is on the dark side I did like it and felt it is very well written.

This brought great memories of when my family owned a piano. You brought to life a treasured moment in a childs life. Laz sure knows how to choose good stories!

So I came over to give it a read, and I have to say I really love it. You are a very good writer, both in grammar, storyline and structure...etc. All you need now is a good publisher.....LOL. Really good story, from such a young person, but one with the insight of a master,you have my vote.

Certain writers have a seemingly innate ability to construct a story and use the most exquisite arrangement of words to create images that captivate the eye and heart. Lillian has done this in Lucien. The beginning paragraph on page 7 is an example...only one of many. How unique and painterly.
This is a story written in the Literary vein, and you have done remarkably well, Lillian.
I too could easily see this as a longer, more in-depth story, and you might consider expanding it. But again, what is here is first rate and so deserving of a vote.

Very well written and edited. A finely crafted piece and a pleasure to read.

Stick with this writing thing; you have a future in it