A cute little story. I think it could be a bit confusing for a child though when you jump point of views.
Also, I think a child might like the creatures to be doing more stuff rather then talking about the love part. I think the child could get a little restless.
Good job though. Congrats. :D
P.S. Could you please read and vote if you think worthy my two stories in the Family Stories competition, To Smile While Crying and The Last Goodbye.
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