Ok so I finally got around to reading your added parts, (Sorry for the wait) and I thought they were awesome! I loved the little part with the napkin and how he criticized her for litering! Keep on writing!

pleas write more

Go ahead, lay it on me. I'm strong. If this is what I need to make it better, then so be it.

Alright, would you like the nice version or the critical version?

I've just finished this short book and I think that a lot of work needs to be done to it. I'm not trying to be mean, I just want to help.

If you want to know my reasons, then respond to this. If not, then I will keep my words to myself, ok?

Fight scene was done very well, good pace, just enough explanation! Keep on writing....Robynn

Heh thanks, Chelsea! But actually I had writer's block for about 2 months before I was able to write the next chapter.

Hello there, nice work.

Thanks, Devon! I've actually already written more, but I'm gonna upload by the chapter.

It's amazing!!! I love the new additions to the book! keep writing!

I just updated the book, it's got 16 more pages. Feel free to comment and advise.