I can't imagine a more terrifying or cruel fate than the one created by you in this story.

I was seriously affected emotionally by this piece. I hope it isn't possible.

This was stunning!!! I love how the ending mirrors the beginning in order to show that he is trapped in a never ending cycle. I have read many entries for the flash fiction contest and this one has become one of my favorites.
May I ask what inspired this piece?
-Angely

Flash Fiction at its best! Gripping action that brings you right to the edge of your seat.

You, my friend, have made everyone else shiver in their boots, because this piece is flawless. Perfect in every sense. I mean, who else could have thought of this? And the fact that it is complete, one of the best examples of a flash fiction piece I've seen so far, astounds me. I can't believe you did it!

Anyway, haha ;) The story itself saddens me and makes me wish I could have stopped the man. And if only the people who knew him had taken the time to really care about him! I shake me head in grief. Who knows how many people really end up like this? It makes me want to cry... so many souls lost...

But you did an outstanding job writing this! It must be among the top five, or I'll be shocked. Because this story was excellent, the evidence of a talented writer. You sir, know how to tell a story ;)

Bravo!

Outstanding, awesome job!
Keep writing!

---RbG
(let me know when voting opens, please)

Producing a tense story, with a twist, in so few words, is pretty skiful. A really good job!

I enjoyed reading this. It's wonderful both the story and the writing. Goodluck and well done.

I really loved this. You have my vote.

Wow, that was awesome! adding to favorites.

This is what flash fiction is all about! A complete story in as few words as possible. You have made it look so easy, but I know it wasn't. In one page you have enabled us to view this man's situation - his past and his future - in such a satisfactory (if grim) manner.

Well done, Jack. Glad you entered the contest and raised the bar.

have you submitted this title, yet?