Good book Jon your narrative was great I could really see your characters while reading.

Thanks for the distraction!
I enjoyed it
James

Thanks everyone for taking the time to read my story and giving me support with my writing. I really appreciate all the kind words.
Good luck to everyone!
Jon

Really liked this Jon...Thanks for telling me about..

i liked your story, though there were some spelling errors. maybe one more proofread bro. but nice work, i really did like it. thanks for keepin on me about it. :)

I appreciate all the feedback. Please check out my other story, Breakfast Cereal. It's a lot darker, but no one really gave me any feedback on that one.
Thanks again for taking the time to read what I have.
Jon

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I'm so happy most of you enjoyed it. It really means a lot hearing those kind words. Good luck to everyone in the contest. And thanks for reading.
Jon

Great plot, and very well executed. The thought patterns and language were very real for this piece.
Keep it up Jon. Best of luck to you.

I really enjoyed your story. You managed to convey in your main character a sense of hopeful apathy... it felt sort of existential without being existential, if that makes any sense.
Don't pay attention to the comments about the foul language. There is a time and place for everything, and you used it appropriately. Good luck.
Incognito