I really enjoyed reading your work. Don't forget to ad a Blurb to give people an overview of the story. Keep up the good work
I like it. I just have to read it two more times to ensure I understand what happened (this is my contemporary problem with most of stories ever). Good things I usually read three times, so I save your to do it :)
greta.perla Your story was really interesting. I also like fantasy writing, alot. I know that you have an accent therefore, I only want to say to you to watch what tense you are writing in,(keep it in the same tense that you started writing with) such as page 7. she should HAVE rahter than, SHE SHOULD HAD. I think that we write somewhat alike and will be helpful to each other. I love a story with a great twist to it, and girl you have it.
Thank you for the advice, Marie. I shall edit and correct... ;-)