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Deleted User

It's a really great poem. The reader knows what it's about right away.
It describes the situation of the girl and -I think- many other people. (I'm sorry if my English isn't very well)

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Forever.Works.

Your English is fine! Thanks for reading it and adding it to your favorites.(:

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Kerim Mallée

Reminds me of "To This Day" by Shane Koyczan.
You have a simple and clean, but amazing writing-style.

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Forever.Works.

Thank you so much, it means a lot.

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Forever.Works.

In a way it's supposed to be confusing, because that's one of the feelings of the narrator..sorry you didn't get it. :\

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neonstripedninja

I personally didn't understand it. The way I read it, the transitions were off, so the poem as a whole was very confusing for me. Other than that, I get the jist of it, so I must say it's pretty good for a first time.

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Deleted User

Absolutely fantastic. I love the free verse style. the art of how the words are placed on the page is part of the mood, coloring everything. Fantastic.

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midknight

I'm so glad that I found out about you poetry. I write in free verse as well. I loved this poem so much. It was passionate, mysterious, well written and very open. You should write more. For a first attempt at poetry, you did very well. You should take a look at my poetry, we write in a similar way. :D I'd love to see how you like it.

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oceanlover

It was a very good poem, I have wrote a lot of poetry but I haven't put any of it online yet so kudos for that, my parents still haven't read my first poem because I worry they wont like it, you are a very brave girl. This is a very touching poem. Keep up the good work!

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Deleted User

I'm not a poet or anything but from the poems I've read, yours is really good. i like the way you don't tell the audience directly what she is screaming about; you leave them guessing. I really like this, so well done and keep it up :)

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secret101

strong poetry, and for me at the end I was speechless, really... :3 like it!

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tha1epikwriter

omg ilove it girl!

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