ya it was ok but you should work on spelling other than that all you could have done was make it abit longer i think you arw a great writer

Are you a five year old? Cuz you wright like one!

this book is soo scary good job

THAT WAS HORRIBLE YOU NEED TO PRACTICE WRITING

Rubish

is that all?

This is a very cheap version of the vampire diaries. You even use the name Damon. You could write good books if you didn't copy.

I like the idea of your story and if you extended it and add more descriptions as others have mentioned I think it could be excellent.

nice but yeah need more action :D

good but you need to put more drama and suspense in it. also You need detail more detail. but all in all good story