I loved it sooooo much sis! I messaged you with editing so that people can stop saying edit, and start saying, I loved it! Keep up that great work, I <3 it!
*~Jess~*

Love it!! You should edit it though a little more. Misspellings and grammatical errors are a huge turn off to some readers. Other than that please keep writing! You have great potential!

umm okay

thankss i will dont worry

Please add more I have to know what happens after the "boom" lol it's really good so far, please continue chica ^=^

It was great!!! :D

I <3ed it, as always. I didn't think it was possible for your work to get any better, but I think it just did. :) Duh, I want you to continue! I loved it! Lol :D Please add more and please keep me posted, sis.
*~Jess~*