good job in your details and descriptions it kept my attention all the way through, there were a couple of spelling errors outside of that very compelling :)
good job in your details and descriptions it kept my attention all the way through, there were a couple of spelling errors outside of that very compelling :)
I've only read the first couple of pages, I'll admit, but I definitely want to read more. Today's been the only break, so I took the advantage. You have a great talent of conjuring a great visual image in the way you write... very nice! I can't wait to read the rest of your series!
Thank you very much for the constructive criticism! I completley understand where you're coming from n will definitley change it!!!!
I really like the first chapter! Its my favorite! It reminds me like when I was little. Its a great story =). ~Keep Writing~
Your story is very intriguing.
Please message me when you complete it.
Chris