You are very creative. I like your tongue in cheek style. Content is everything to me,this story held my interest and was enjoyable. Thats what makes people come back for more.

Is this a story based on fact? I bet it is.

Good underlying message and fun read. Easy read execept on few occassions I had to think about R and J and connection between Henry Pyner and Enid creebs. On page 7 you use Henry name, before explaining later who he is. From my view point would have been simpler to connect Henry and Enids name immediatelly to R and J and then write on.

die in the saddle, a wish of many a buck...p

Oh Barry, that was wonderful. So clever and enormously funny, I’m still smiling.

Kudos for a very clever piece of prose.

Carol x