I loved the story it was described very well, it made you feel as if you were at the place, it's a very creative and its just a good book. I didn't really see any faults and I loved the names you used, they were very unique and fitted the story. xoxox
Lauren
Your story has a strong beginning, that hooks the reader. I love how you continue to build the intrigue, and captivate the reader throughout the remainder of the chapter.
I love reading your stories, but this is definitely my favorite so far.
Chris
I have to agree with the other comments here. I think the concept is great and with a bit of fine-tuning this could be developed into a terrific longer story. I thought there was a nice balance of narrative and dialogue and the action moved forward at the right pace... definitely want to see where this goes from here.
I read Zylena's Element. First let me say that it's subject matter isn't one that attracts my attention for the offset, but I was pleasantly surprised when I found myself engulfed in the story. I give it 5 stars for originality and creativity. It's my hope to get to a point in my writing that I can create a whole world from imagination. Of course, there are a few grammar/spelling things, we all seem to get a snag like that,... Show more
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