I just read your book, I was a little bit confused. You have a great concept of what you want to write,But at the same time the story moves to fast. For example: Honey was talking to kane on the couch in the living about her sister diamond wanting her to be safe, Then all of a sudden it went to: Soon honey found herself in the kitchen with kane feeding her strawberry's then they fell asleep naked. You have good idea's, But... Show more
I just read your book, I was a little bit confused. You have a great concept of what you want to write,But at the same time the story moves to fast. For example: Honey was talking to kane on the couch in the living about her sister diamond wanting her to be safe, Then all of a sudden it went to: Soon honey found herself in the kitchen with kane feeding her strawberry's then they fell asleep naked. You have good idea's, But maybe you should add more detail for readers like me who loves detailed books. Sometimes when there isn't a lot of details it can be confusing from one part to another. Good Luck Yasmine. Keep writing. Latrice
Thxs I will try to go into more details