the feeling

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the feeling
The feeling of not being able to see behind the vail of the indescrible. Not knowing what is and what is not. The feeling of the unknown and madning.

  • Poetry
  • 329 Words
  • Ages 0 and up
  • 436
  • 1
  • Publication Date: 05-30-2011
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dramaqueen401
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dramaqueen401

ok thanks. I will take what you said and work with it. You are kind for helping me out.

balancechosen
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balancechosen

I like your subjects in The Feeling. Though, it doesn't really have a rhythmic read to it. It gets confusing. Try to edit it a bit, and make lines end when the part should like this.

I loved him
he never knew me
Which tore me apart

It hurt my friends
It hurt me
It hurt everyone around my soul

I randomly made that up on the spot

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