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Just a suggestion.

She looked up the stairs leading to the cathedral. Taking a deep breath to calm her nerves as she considered what she was about to do. Without the permission of her parents, she was about to be married. Nothing before in her life had she done without the consent of her parents. She was getting married to the son of her parent’s mortal enemies for some reason. She didn’t understand why, because they never told her they hated Alejandor’s parents. However, they were going to flip their lids when they found out she knew him, much less marry him.
Alejandro Montenegro looked up as the girl entered the library looking innocent and small, browsing through the shelves. He had noticed her when she arrived on campus looking frightened like a child on her first day of school, ready to bolt. His eyes caressed her face noticing her beauty. And how delicate she looked with her dark brown tresses falling down her back, nearly to her waist. Her eyes were a lovely shade of green . . .

Please understand, I am not an editor, or an Eglish major. I liked your story. There is a place for long sentences, and you have some very long ones. They can have a point, but if to long you can lose your purpose and audiance. I'd suggest you take a look and break you paragraphes down, make your reader feel what you are trying to relay. Keep the faith, I just posted my first book. I have one on Amazon. It freaks me out.

Great book