Why would you put this in erotic? There was nothing erotic about it.
I really liked it, Danielle! But you rushed it really fast, and I am assuming you were trying to type fast too, because you missed some punctuation and spelling and basic grammar that I know you know.... I REALLY liked it.... :D (See you at school tomorrow!)
thanks alout realy thats was a test book im still righting my good book
Nice start. Slow down just a little bit. Talk about the characters and let us get the know them along with the action.