Falling Up
Ever since Natalie took her first breath in this world, she was safe. The accident that almost cost her life many years is still controlling her, and yet she doesn’t even remember how she lived. Would a boy be the key to unlock her memories, and exactly who is he.



I’m only beginning to write this story so please be patient with me. I have written more than this but its too choppy and would mess with the story so I didn’t add in.

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natiwood

I really like the story plot, but I must say you could use some help with punctuation.
EXAMPLE: Jo wanted to go see his mom he could not wait till she got out of the hospital.(what not to do)
Jo wanted to go see his mom, he could not wait till she got out of the hospital.(See the difference? You have a pause between each of the possible sentences.)

A couple of your sentences are run-ons, and you should have a break in the page... Show more

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