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I like it but I could barely understand what you wrote due to lack of spelling.
I just updated a new chapter....its been a while since I got on bookrix.....sorry guys it took so long....school and stuff
It looks like you've got a great start here. The characters are interesting well thought out. The cover art is beautiful, did you do that yourself? I think this story would work well as an illustrated novel or comic.
On the constructive side, there are some problems with tense, sentence structure and grammar. Nothing that some editing couldn't fix. Keep up the good work :)
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