I agree with a couple of other comments here. It could definately pass as the beginning to a movie and i would like to see you expand upon the whole idea.
Too short for me, but that is a good thing and is meant as a compliment to some well written work.
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This was very entertaining, but more important, you made a very complicated subject easy to follow. Not a sci-fi fan (except for Ray Bradbury), sometimes I get totally lost with all the strange new words that are conjured up. YOU definitely have a handle on this topic and wrote it extremely well. Very impressed.
your story is straight forward and believable ..enjoyed.