I like the final cover - it would be super cool if you could make the background around her into something darker - like black swirling with blue... or something like that. It would be really dramatic. :)
Wow I like where this is going. Really awesome story u got going. Oh and btw the cover looks
really cool.
Oh cool! I know him. I didn't know he was doing covers.
after looking at his work, I immeditly asked him
Yup he's pretty good. I wish I had his talent! lol!
haha LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!! POLCE UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!! tell me when you do!!!!!!
lol sure thing love!
You've got the bases for a very creative and entertaining story. My only critique would be to start new paragraph for every person speaking. You've got good descriptions of the characters, though I feel they are a bit blunt or perhaps a better word is rushed. I do like the fact the story begins the way it does with the character being thrown into a"action" There were no grammar misspelling that caught my eye as I read but... Show more
Thank you! I'm just a Middle School student with dreams of becoming a great writer! That means a lot come from you!
lol No problem. And I'm just a college student with the same dream, trust me, we're in the same boat :) I'm glad I could help
Such a wonderful book this is, full of images...love the style of writing...way to go nerdybird!
Thanks and Aaron did a lovely job! I forgot about that.... I need to go change it....
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