the simplicity of this poem added a lot to it's meaning. I loved this and I am very glad that I found this on the swap thread. Make sure you try to avoid being redundant in some parts but other than that I'd say you are a very talented poet.
Hey the hart was my friend is a hart and thats her name spelling.And I thank you for the criticism. I have really bad spelling.
Liked it! <3 Though I do have some critiques:
You spelled heart wrong(you spelled it hart) at the end of the first stanza.
I love that you choose free verse and not the typical Shakespearean couplet.
However, I think the meaning being the poem seems a bit shallow. I can't really feel the feeling your trying to convey. That's just my opinion.
Good job! You have talent :)
Keep Writing!
---RbG
I was intrigued by your message in the post, and so I opened your book.
I agree with kbaxter...you have talent. There are a few spelling errors, and I wonder...could you sing these lines? I mean, write music to them?
I've never written lyrics, but yours really show a lot of seriously good emotion. Do keep writing. Good job:)
Yes you could sing them that was the way they were meant to be. I write songs as pomes.
thank you
you're welcome :)