Will They Save Me.....

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Will They Save Me.....
13 year old Ally Ridder is taken by Better Living Industries that are trying to take over the world with her secrets her mother told her not to tell Better Living Industries but she gets saved by the Kill Joys that she never knew until her mother send them to save her. She finds out that her mom was killed by her worse enemies. Will she save the world from Better Living Industries....or die trying.

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Nice start i think you should do some paragraphs because i found it a little hard reading it because it was all together if you get what i mean.

And go into more detail in what's happening i know from experience when you want to write everything down so you just write everything but like that your wasting your talent. If you explain and put more detail or emotions of the characters, surroundings and etc it engages the readers... Show more

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SeiKitten
SeiKitten

Thanks!

Faith.Raven
Faith.Raven

No prob i hope i helped ^o^

SeiKitten
SeiKitten

You did :P

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