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This is good - I can safely say you're one of the better writers here, at least insofar as the care you take with alliteration and some very abstract (but effective) turns of phrase. It gives a good snapshot of an autistic kid (who is oblivious) and the family that has to deal with the fact that the he operates on a separate plane of reality, basically.
On the other hand, there are a lot of characters, considering the story... Show more
Hi Rachie! This was so cute. Love you and hope you win!
It's amazing how two siblings can be so far apart emotionally yet come together and learn from each other in so many ways. This was beautifully written and illustrated through words. I could see everything that was happening. I really enjoyed it. ;-)
I agree with you, flash fiction is not a very good place for multiple characters or complex characters, even though that was what I threw into mine. I really did try for the "forward motion" or the "point" of the story. The mother's section, where theres watching her children... Show more
I agree with you, flash fiction is not a very good place for multiple characters or complex characters, even though that was what I threw into mine. I really did try for the "forward motion" or the "point" of the story. The mother's section, where theres watching her children who manage to come together despite the previous statements about how they irritated each other and so forth as well as the mother admitting that it wasn't always bad even though before she'd been at her wits end and had even slapped her child in frustration. Then again even I can admit it was alot like shoving elephants into Volkswagens to put all of that into drabbles. It is probably a subject I would be better off using for a longer piece in the future.
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